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As most of you know, I’ve been working on my first novel for a little while now. I’m deep into revisions right now and pretty much squeezing every last second available  in the day to get the new draft to my editor (I’d get a lot more done if we could add that 25th hour). For those awaiting reviews, I apologize for delays. I’m still reading and will post a review to everyone I’ve agreed to review. Your patience is greatly appreciated. Not one of you has prodded me angrily and I love you for it.

I thought I would give a glimpse of what I’ve been up to though. In my Mission Control series I critique the opening paragraph, or the hook, of a novel. But let it not be said that I’m opposed to the same critique. So, here it is, the first paragraph of my soon-to-be-published Fantasy novel “A Ransom of Flames”:

My child died before she took her first breath. As she left my womb I felt her life ripped from the world, devoured, like the heart of a doe beneath the jaws of a predator.

Just so everyone knows, I wrote these words BEFORE I ever conceived my sweet little girl born last June. Essentially, I tried to think of the worst possible thing that could happen to my main character, Maleia, and led with that.

So, there you have it. I’ll put up the first chapter at some point, but for now, any feedback on this snippet is welcome. How’s my hook doing?